The Power of Tension
Cally Jackson Writes and Rachel Morgan Writes are hosting a Blogfest on tension in fiction.Rules: “Give us an excerpt (up to 300 words) from your manuscript or recently completed work (or just a random scene) that drips with tension and will tie us in knots wanting to know more. It doesn’t matter what the piece is about, as long as it screams tension.”
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Ladies and gentlemen, I give you an excerpt from near the end of Darkwalker, Book 2 of the Innocence Saga (to be published later this year), between my heroine, Innocence, and mysterious, violent, unpredictable Rome. High fantasy has a lot of back story and world building, and this was just about the only thing I could find over both books that was condensed enough to fit the 300 word limit.
“You know your problem?” He suddenly loomed taller and angrier than I’d seen him before. “You think you’re too good for me.”
“What?” I retorted, refusing to back down even though he was a good few inches taller than me. “That’s the complete opposite of what I think. Rome, don’t you know the dangers of being with a banshee? Especially if you’ve been tainted?”
“I’m completely aware of the dangers. I’m not stupid, contrary to what you think. But you know, it wouldn’t hurt to give it a try. It’s not like I’m the only one here who has killed anyone.” He moved as if to walk away. I grabbed his arm.
“The last thing I want in this world is to hurt you.”
He turned to me; put his arms around my waist. Surprised, his closeness hit me strongly and flooded me with adrenalin. His scent swirled around me – both his unwashed body odour and the smell of his sin. My heart thundered as he put his mouth close to my ear. His voice was barely a whisper. “You’re hurting me by refusing me.”
“What can I do?” My voice dropped low, my eyes pleading, my arms automatically curling around him. “You don’t understand.”
He dropped his head so we were at eye level. I inhaled his sweet breath – it made me dizzy with desire.
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Posted on May 23, 2011, in Bloghop, Darkwalker (Innocence Saga #2) and tagged books, Fantasy, Fantasy literature, Fiction, Literature, publishing, self-publishing, stories, Writer, Writing. Bookmark the permalink. 53 Comments.